Essay Self Evaluation

I thoroughly enjoyed researching and writing about Ai Weiwei. His style of work has really inspired me in my way of making. I felt that I had done an adequate amount of research on Weiwei beforehand but due to how much I move around and my habit of losing things because of it I had not actually read any books about the subject. I found that all of my research was taken from websites for I tried to find time to read and take notes during things like my lunch breaks. I would like to try to read more for I enjoy it but do not feel confident enough to rent out a book and not lose it. This is something I plan to work on. I felt I focused on the central point quite well but deviated a little bit between paragraphs somewhat blurring the lines between what my points were. I am unsure whether this is a good thing and helps the read feel more natural or If this makes things feel disjointed. I would appreciate your opinion on it. Before submission I only had one friend proof read it and would like to somewhat expand that pool so I can get a wider range of feedback in order to let me get a more educated idea of what I need to improve on.

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